Charlie II

Hmm, I always try not to use them because I don't know exactly how. I guess that even if I did know, I'd probably not because they always make me ...

Wow, I've lost where everything is now! It looks awesome and the graphics are really nice and neat. Especially the chimp at the bottom of the screen :D . The ...

Nice for a first piece of work. I've always struggled to use anything that's already there to make a story so I'm interested to see how this all turns out. ...

Hello, critique time: The bird spread its wings and flew. Love the first sentence, it's short, it's sweet and it drops us nicely into an interesting bit! Although, you already ...

*sighs* This isn't really something that the Admins can fix, it's really the attitudes of people (which is obviously not something you can take a spanner to). My quibble is ...

The people, the wonderful imaginative caring people. People that aren't perfect. People that need help and people that need to help. It's a great community that seems to hold its ...

Since I can't 'line by line' this, I'll 'word by word' it! A few points: YOU All capitals for a reason? earth It may just be me but usually it ...

And be really obnoxious about it too. Well :? . If it works... Brilliant! It's great to see something as good and useful as this be recognised for the helpful ...

"READ IT THROUGH FIRST! I DON'T WANT TO READ YOUR RAMBLING, QUICKLY SCRAWLED, AIMLESS RUBBISH!" Yeah. That teacher had problems, but it's a good tip (I think :? ). DarkLight

Oh very nice! Mysterious, interesting and chilling. Of course :wink: , I do have a few comments: She toyed around with it, placing it on the desk before her, putting ...

Ok, the repeated stops are put in for effect but they don't really work. There are far better ways of writing a short pause and just putting three full stops ...

The Da Vinci Code, the only reason it sold so well was 'cause the Church made such a damn fuss. YES! WELL PUT! All you need for a good book ...

Wow, I like this! I remember reading your prologue bit before. If I haven't already critiqued that, I'll do that next. Just a few things: “Let me sleep, Pier … ...

To begin with, next time you post a chapter/story/piece, please double space your paragraphs. If you've transferred it from a word processing program which has tabs and stuff in it, ...

Also, if the Bible is the word of God, I think the author has a slight divine advantage. ... Well, obviously Paolini negates THAT doesn't he :? . Oh well. ...